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Monday, November 1, 2010

Why I miss you so badly??????


I wake up in morning by taking your name,

I dont bother about any damn fame,

Was just thinking about your damn smile,

And suddenly your short text came.


I always think why I miss you so much?

What is so great in you as such?

Still I keep on missing you a lot,

Looks as if I m tied in your clutch.


I don't know why with you i talk?

Time goes by as if I m taking a walk,

I was confused and still I am,

Coz ur behavior gives me a shock.


Why you keep on hurting me?

Why you threw me deep in the sea?

Please improve this nature of yours,

This is my first and final Plea.


Can somebody give me a few suggestion?

All my thoughts are going into congestion,

Why i miss you so badly always?

Was a question and is still a question.

2 comments:

  1. Good one, bhai!!
    Needs a lot of improvisation.....
    We'll work it out together..


    Regards,
    Amby

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  2. Thanks Amby,

    Thanks for finding out the negatives. I know there are many mistakes but i wrote this in just 15-20 minutes. Target was something different. There are many things written just for teh sake of rhyme.. By the way we will work upon it together..

    Appreciate ur time that u spend behind reading my work..

    Thanks brother..
    :)

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